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Post by sitohruharuno on Sept 29, 2014 16:32:05 GMT -5
The silent screams, The midnight tears; This is my inward insanity The mental pleas, The thoughts inside; They are mental calamities The closed mouth The open eyes; That is my attempt to hide The words on a page, The simple expressions, Those show what's inside Okay, first poem up! Tell me what you think, constructive criticism gladly accepted.
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Post by The Katarite on Sept 29, 2014 17:03:38 GMT -5
Great poem! I love the flow and dark aura this poem possesses. It sort of makes you read it in a creepy tone.
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Post by Darcest_Light on Oct 11, 2014 15:27:05 GMT -5
It feels like I'm in an Insanity Ward.This poem greatly shows how patients feel, a very darkly setting as Katarite said Really Awesome
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